Friday, 22 February 2013

Different Paths


It’s that time of the week again for Lillie’s Five Sentence Fiction http://lilliemcferrin.com/five-sentence-fiction-abandoned/ Check out the other contributions at http://www.inlinkz.com/wpview.php?id=244375 This weeks word is ABANDONED

Different Paths

Fiona often thought back to the dreams she gave up when she fell pregnant at 16.

“She’s the brains of the family and will go far,” her father used to boast, but not after she broke the news to him.

Today, she looks around at the proud faces of her children and grandchildren as the ceremony gets underway.

“I knew you could do it and I’m delighted to be here to see it,” her father’s says and hugs her as tight as his arthritis ridden body can manage.

As she proudly accepts her degree, she appreciates that they weren’t abandoned dreams, just put on hold while she took a different path to get to this point.

13 comments:

  1. This is awesome! Wonderful take on this prompt!

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    1. Thank you Ann. I was reviewing some previous FSF stories I'd written and they appear quite dark, so really wanted to lighten the mood on this one. Glad you enjoyed!

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    1. Thanks for taking the time to read and comment Sharry, much appreciated.

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  3. Loved it. Poignant lesson/regret which finally got acknowledged at the end when she attained her goal of graduaton which had to take an unexpected detour when she erred in letting herself be taken into a relationship she knew would be wrong.

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    1. Thank you Robin. Really glad you enjoyed it!

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  4. Life takes time, and twists and turns...but we get there in the end! Great story!

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    1. Thank you Lisa. Isn't it generally true of all our lives. Sometimes we can't see the good for the bad yet things usually work out.

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  5. What a fantastic story. . . . whatever our dreams, as long as we get there it doesn't matter the path The point is never to give up on them. A well written, emotional piece. x

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    1. Thank you Lizzie. True, don't give up on your dreams. Thanks for taking the time to read and comment.

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  7. Marie I am only getting to this now, I love it, shows if you have the determination, you can achieve anything.

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  8. Thanks Mary, for taking the time to read and leave a comment. Glad you enjoyed it.

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