Friday, 22 February 2013

Different Paths


It’s that time of the week again for Lillie’s Five Sentence Fiction http://lilliemcferrin.com/five-sentence-fiction-abandoned/ Check out the other contributions at http://www.inlinkz.com/wpview.php?id=244375 This weeks word is ABANDONED

Different Paths

Fiona often thought back to the dreams she gave up when she fell pregnant at 16.

“She’s the brains of the family and will go far,” her father used to boast, but not after she broke the news to him.

Today, she looks around at the proud faces of her children and grandchildren as the ceremony gets underway.

“I knew you could do it and I’m delighted to be here to see it,” her father’s says and hugs her as tight as his arthritis ridden body can manage.

As she proudly accepts her degree, she appreciates that they weren’t abandoned dreams, just put on hold while she took a different path to get to this point.
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  1. Anonymous22 February 2013 at 09:36

    This is awesome! Wonderful take on this prompt!

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    1. Unknown23 February 2013 at 09:23

      Thank you Ann. I was reviewing some previous FSF stories I'd written and they appear quite dark, so really wanted to lighten the mood on this one. Glad you enjoyed!

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  2. Anonymous22 February 2013 at 16:30

    Very nice, and good for her.

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    1. Unknown23 February 2013 at 09:24

      Thanks for taking the time to read and comment Sharry, much appreciated.

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  3. Robin Leigh Morgan25 February 2013 at 06:10

    Loved it. Poignant lesson/regret which finally got acknowledged at the end when she attained her goal of graduaton which had to take an unexpected detour when she erred in letting herself be taken into a relationship she knew would be wrong.

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    1. Unknown26 February 2013 at 09:03

      Thank you Robin. Really glad you enjoyed it!

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  4. Lisa Shambrook26 February 2013 at 01:57

    Life takes time, and twists and turns...but we get there in the end! Great story!

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    1. Unknown26 February 2013 at 09:05

      Thank you Lisa. Isn't it generally true of all our lives. Sometimes we can't see the good for the bad yet things usually work out.

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  5. Unknown2 March 2013 at 02:17

    What a fantastic story. . . . whatever our dreams, as long as we get there it doesn't matter the path The point is never to give up on them. A well written, emotional piece. x

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    1. Unknown4 March 2013 at 13:46

      Thank you Lizzie. True, don't give up on your dreams. Thanks for taking the time to read and comment.

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  7. Mary T Bradford5 March 2013 at 10:03

    Marie I am only getting to this now, I love it, shows if you have the determination, you can achieve anything.

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  8. Unknown6 March 2013 at 08:43

    Thanks Mary, for taking the time to read and leave a comment. Glad you enjoyed it.

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