Monday, 4 March 2013

Five Sentence Fiction - Empty


Time for a new prompt for Lillie’s Five Sentence Fiction. This weeks’ is EMPTY http://lilliemcferrin.com/five-sentence-fiction-empty/ Check out the other contributions at http://www.inlinkz.com/wpview.php?id=244375

A big welcome to the 5SF link Mary Bradford Check out her contribution at http://marytbradford-author.blogspot.ie/2013/03/5-sentence-fiction-challenge.html?spref=fb

 
Empty

Empty… she never knew what he meant by this. Ambitious, progressive, intelligent were the words she used to describe herself, never empty.

“Wait, it’s too soon, not yet” or “it is not the right time”, were always the excuses she’d use when he pressed her to progress their relationship.
Now, as she looks around her large penthouse apartment and sips a solitary latte, she wonders who to share the news of her latest promotion with. He is long gone, she now knows what he meant by empty.


14 comments:

  1. Nice theme about the importance of balance in our lives.

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    1. So true Jayne. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment.

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  2. He who hesitates is lost. She have been attentive to the words he had spoken. I found this thought provking.

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  3. Marie a good take on the word, empty. So many can have their priorities in the wrong place and like the woman in your story, it is often too late when they realise this. Well done.

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    1. Thanks Mary. Nothing wrong with ambition, but she forgot to appreciate the support and lost it. Glad you enjoyed!

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  4. It's so easy to overlook the things that really matter while chasing the things we think are important.

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    1. True Sarah, it's about appreciating what really matters and those that care. Thanks for taking the time to comment.

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  5. I really like your take on the prompt. There's a lesson in these sentences :)

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  6. Thank you Lillie. These promts are a factastic exercise for the brain!

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  7. Painful and real, and sadly too often the case. Well done.

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    1. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment Ann, much appreciated.

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  8. Sometimes we lose ourselves in the business of life, her partner realized she was missing out, she saw it in herself too late... but hopefully next time she will remember. This was written very well to convey the mood and message!

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    1. True, makes me happy for what I have. Thank you very much for you feedback Josie.

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